U5 Q3 In-class Writing
Comment:Tallulah, it is wonderful to see you producing work again. Please see the comment in the assignment. It is hard to assess the changes without seeing the original. In your rewrite, it looks like you added a lot of extra material, much of it textual passages. The focus of the paper has shifted from the prompt, though, as you did this. Therefore, lengthening didn’t necessary equate to strengthening.