For my Question 1 final draft, I definitely improved from my first draft but since this was our first in class writing, this was not at the level that I feel satisfied with. Specifically, the text for me was incredibly hard to understand within the time frame, so I found it difficult to decipher. Thus, from my entire rubric, I wanted to only include a snippet of what I received in order to highlight the good that I achieved within this paper.
Links to previous draft: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1d2aJ_tA19vxPDwRoQ9C-hi5AdLIWEYReh0xstbVfQnc/edit?usp=sharing
TPCASTTs is something I am unfamiliar with, and this year was the first time I ever learned this strategy to dissect poems. However, this is a very time consuming task, often taking me 30 mins or more. As shown on Schoology, my initial TPCASTTs were pretty terrible. My analysis was fairly shallow and I didn’t utilise the paper space to annotate. Below, I’ve linked two TPCASTTs that I feel shows a good progression of my skills
During the course of typhoon Mangkhut’s destruction, I wrote this poem depicting my thoughts during this period. I thought this poem was a lot better than my first one, as I strayed from rhyming every sentences. I think this upped the ante because it doesn’t read like a childish folksong.
Mangosteen, a fruit bursting with sweet flesh
Who knew the destruction it could cause?
The wind’s whistling and heavy rain stirred
me to life.
Who knew a day that ruined hundreds of homes
and injured the innocent
was the best night of sleep I had in a while.
Ten hours of peaceful dreaming went from
two days to four.
Before I slept, I felt guilty about the fruit
that wrecked havoc on others,
but my head touched the pillow and my body went still.
Link to presentation: natasha trethewey