My work: Here
Targets: S11 – EE; SC13 – EE; SC15 – EE
Feedback: “Brilliant! Clever! Love the words and images and attention to form and rhythm here. This is fun, coherent, and buoyant. I didn’t know you were such a poet! May I keep this as an exemplar?”
My work: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1waoF85mPxy2iYhggzCa46sTz8avviAQCAjQtWVKfJtg/edit?usp=sharing
Rubric: SC3: AE; SC6: AE; SC13: AE
Comments: Heather, There is presently a misalignment between the thrust of the prompt and the message you are exploring. While symbolism and allusions can be key elements of style, you should also be sure that your analysis is showing how they are tools for the reader to understand the “effects of idealization” and “sense of adventure”. Nov. 26 deadline for any further draft. Perhaps a consult first would be good.
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