My work: Pages 6-7 of this doc

Targets: ME

Feedback: “AP Scale Score = 6/9. Comments can be found on the hard copy returned to you in class.”

My work: Here

Targets: SC2 – ME; SC5 – ME; SC8 – AE; SC14 – ME/AE; SC15 – ME

Feedback: “Heather, I can see you are making great effort to step up your professional tone and language. You are achieving that. What is lost, though, is clarity. I believe if you allow yourself to be a bit more forthright – say it like it is – you will have greater success with clarity for your reader. Disconnect between evidence and analysis and thesis still lingers. Future focus: strong thesis. See doc for notes.”