Poet chosen: Wole Soyinka
Mrs. Brayko’s comments:
Olivia, improvement is here in the way you bring the author in at points and seek to have a stronger thesis and topic sentences. Still, HOW power leads to evil and immoral acts is not quite clear, only that they are linked. It was difficult for you to sustain the analysis and so you veer toward summary as you get further along in the paper. Future focus: Think about themes not in term of single words (power) but in phrases and sentences (power corrupts those who have it and oppresses those who don’t). See doc for details.
Mrs. Brayko’s comments:
Olivia, much of your essay is polished and improved. Your control of organization and sentence structure is quite good. The interpretation of the Collins poem is misconstrued/misunderstood somewhat; that is because there is irony that the reader must pick up on in order to detect the full meaning of the piece (that it is NOT okay to lie to children).
Prompt: One of the strongest human drives seems to be a desire for power. Write an essay in which you discuss how a character in a novel or a drama struggles to free himself or herself from the power of others or seeks to gain power over others. Be sure to demonstrate in your essay how the author uses this power struggles to enhance the meaning of the work.
Can I invite others to see the world through my own original poetry?
I think I can invite others to see the world through my own poems. Everybody has their own individual experiences which influences their own thoughts and feelings about certain things. Thus, nobody shares the exact same perspective of the world around them. Through my original poetry, I believe that people can see the world through my own unique point of view. Through the topics I write about and the subjects I use, people are able to see the kinds of things that I care about or are prominent in my life. My diction and tone convey my feelings and attitude toward the topic. The figurative language that I use can be indicative of the way that I view the world. When I use detailed imagery describing a certain thing, it can be seen that I pay a lot of attention towards it. When I use devices such as apostrophe, rhetorical questions, or even personification or metaphors, then people can see what things I am wondering about.